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Morbus Iff (talk | contribs) (Heh, heh. But, a concern...) |
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Revision as of 09:25, 5 August 2005
I enjoyed this one. Am a bit concerned about some of the "flow" - if she's been burnt, and is dead, then she HAS died, and the family HAS gone away. Yet, your first paragraph talks as if she hasn't died. --Morbus Iff 09:25, 5 Aug 2005 (EDT)