Ghyll talk:Carsokian

Right. Have at it then. Hack it apart. There must be plenty of inconsistancies. I'm not quite happy with this entry, but I felt that someone had to dib it and no one else seemed eager, so I did. Mainly, to keep the game flowing. That'll teach me! I'll add the dates to the timeline after all the edits are done. --Doctor Phineas Crank 22:58, 22 Sep 2004 (EDT)

No worries about the timeline - when I go through my copyediting phase, I always update all the other stuff in tune with it. A very quick readthrough (pizza in the oven, no time to factcheck) makes me pause on the Gabson Foye mention: wasn't his future wife hinted at a relation with Bethany, as opposed to him? Or is it just his mother who heard wrong? My memory just may be wrong. --Morbus Iff 23:18, 22 Sep 2004 (EDT)

Well, I've a fair few dates, so I think it's only fair that I do some of that work. And, I'm happy to help out. Now, as to the Bethany/Foye reference.... After re-reading, I think you are correct! It was Siam Sinch that Foye was to wed. I'll make corrections at lunch. --Doctor Phineas Crank 08:20, 23 Sep 2004 (EDT)

One small not-quite-inconsistency that you may nontheless like to deal with: "they have representatives as far as the Evesque Valley and the Sarfelogian Mountains" and "[t]hey also have notable enclaves in the Vale of Serdoch, Alezan and the Baleman neighborhood" is repetitious since the Baleman is in the Evesque Valley (on its northern edge). --Sean B. Palmer 08:11, 25 Sep 2004 (EDT)