Ghyll talk:Bobby Shwarmph - Revision history

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Bast ResNovae: typo fixes

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68.51.130.124 at 16:01, 12 September 2004

2004-09-12T16:01:16Z

Morbus Iff: Random copy editing. Yes, I even spellcheck discussions. LuuSah!

2004-09-12T14:32:58Z

Random copy editing. Yes, I even spellcheck discussions. LuuSah!

68.51.130.124 at 14:23, 12 September 2004

2004-09-12T14:23:29Z

Qwentyth Pyre: Welcome, and good job

2004-09-12T04:41:38Z

Welcome, and good job

Sbp: And another thing...

2004-09-12T03:34:40Z

And another thing...

Sbp: Replied to Bast ResNovae.

2004-09-12T03:31:41Z

Replied to Bast ResNovae.

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−	~~Sorry, I'm new to this- Am I even close? --[[User:Bast ResNovae\|Bast ResNovae]] 22:15, 11 Sep 2004~~
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−	Hi there! Welcome to Ghyll and thanks for taking the time to play, etc. Your entry is a pretty good one (I'm being consistently surprised by the outstanding quality of random players that've stumbled across Ghyll--may I ask where you found out about it from?), but of course there are quite a few little things that I'm able to nitpick at.
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−	For a start, though the name "Izzy Eddard" is hilarious, we try to avoid earth parodies as much as possible. Though it's certainly in keeping with the feel of many of the current Ghyll names, and indeed follows a pattern similar to "Morphous Ibb" in [[Quezlarian numerals]], it'd be nice if you could think of something equally as hilarious but without the earth parody overtones.
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−	Secondly, since "Folktown Records edition 419 was issued on -5/12/8 EC" according to [http://inamidst.com/misc/folkrec/419 my little script], that means that FR must've commented on his disappearance ''before'' he disappeared, which is course is rather inconsistent. You might want to use the online script linked above to find an FR edition after -4/7/22 that suits your tastes. Remember that due to the dates being negative, -4 comes ''after'' -5. It is a bit confusing; sorry!
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−	By "aurosociology" I presume you meant [[AuroAnthropology]], and though I wasn't sure, I corrected it anyway. You can check out all of the [http://gamegrene.com/wiki/?title=Bobby_Shwarmph&diff=0&oldid=698 little copyediting changes] I made (argh, actually the diff sucks so it'll be difficult for you to find them). The one thing that I wasn't able to do is pick your citations for you. According to the rules, you have to refer to one existing entry, and two new "phantom" entries. It's up to you to select which ones you want to link, so I'm leaving it down to you. Check out the bottom of all of the existing entries for the letter "b" as examples of what kind of thing we'd like. Don't forget to link to any existing entries and phantoms where you can in the main body of your entry, though the admins (including me) can do this for you once you've picked which citations you like. Also, please sign all your works using the signature button in the editing toolbar: it's the second one in from the right.
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−	Also, who is "Glynn"? He's mentioned only once in the article and not explained. You spelled "Shwarmph" wrong a couple of times too, which is probably not a good thing as you're writing an article on him! At least you're not writing [[Supetupheraraphes]]...
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−	It's funny that the entry I'm about to post also invented a currency system (that's intrinsic to one of the jokes of the entry), and one that's named quite similarly to yours. Since yours doesn't seem to be intrinsic to the meaning of the entry, I've renamed it [currency] for now, and will fill it in with my own when I've published it, for consistency. If you really, really want to use the original name, please let me know (or simply edit it back) so that we can discuss which one to use.
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−	~~So all in all, very good effort, but needs a bit more tweaking from you. And welcome again to Ghyll! --[[User:Sbp\|Sean B. Palmer]] 23:31, 11 Sep 2004 (EDT)~~
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−	Welcome Bast! I agree with Sean, an excellent entry on to the scene of Ghyll. Hmmm... Sean is introducing a currency system, and I just introduced a set of day and month names to work with the existing calender... this should be fun. Hope to be seeing more from you Bast. Feel free to add commentary to the end of other folk's entries if you'd like. Just remember that comments aren't "binding" upon the world, while actual entries are. --[[User:Qwentyth Pyre\|Qwentyth Pyre]] 00:41, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)
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−	Thanks! No, I knew about the typos, It was just 'I'm on my way to bed and I'm allergic to doing to much editing on stuff I know I'm going to have too rework extensively anyway.' I heard about Ghyll from Morbus- I'm a journalist, and know him from "back in the day"... he sent me the link after I was whining I spend all day writing about a lot of things I could care less about. Believe it or not, for a newbie and nongamer, it's tough trying to keep the history of the A's _alone_. Keeping it all straight in my head while working is a little daunting, along with trying to get the hang of the formatting conventions and the interface.
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−	Lets see- Sean, I have no particular attachment to the currency system at all and was a little reluctant to name one for that reason, because i figured it was near and dear to someone's heart. But, figured somone would step in if I screwed it up. I'll have to go back and read the citations on the issue numbers and date system- might have gotten something a little backwards. I did read that bit about earth parodies and had to do some rewrriting as a result, but, couldn't resist the name... don't worry, I'll think of something else, though. To be honest, just wondered if anyone'd pick up on it ;-)
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−	PS: OK, made some changes. Was going to link to the Association of Conspiracy Theologists, but there's an awful lot of academia out there already, so I invented a suitably mysterious war for the mysterious Shwarmph... seems like such a contentious world probably comes to blows more often than this record currently reflects. Also, linked to "luminous manuscript." Am thinking it's some sort of successor to illuminated manuscripts, maybe with hyperlinks, or glows in the dark, or is neon or projects like a hologram- for the hell of it. Just thought it might be fun to define if anyone chooses to inherit it. --[[User:Bast ResNovae\|Bast ResNovae]] 10:09, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)

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 Welcome Bast!  I agree with Sean, an excellent entry on to the scene of Ghyll.  Hmmm... Sean is introducing a currency system, and I just introduced a set of day and month names to work with the existing calender... this should be fun.  Hope to be seeing more from you Bast.  Feel free to add commentary to the end of other folk's entries if you'd like.  Just remember that comments aren't "binding" upon the world, while actual entries are. --[[User:Qwentyth Pyre|Qwentyth Pyre]] 00:41, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)
-Thanks! No, I knew about the typos, It was just I'm on my way to bed and I'm allergic to doing to much editing on stuff I know I'm going to have too rework extensively anyway. I heard about Ghyll from Morbus- I'm a journalist, and know him from "back in the day"... he sent me the link after I was whining I spend all day writing about a lot of things I could care less about. Believe it or not, for a newbie and nongamer, it's tough trying to keep the history of the A's _alone_. Keeping it all straight in my head while working is a little daunting, along with trying to get the hang of the formatting conventions and the interface.
+Thanks! No, I knew about the typos, It was just 'I'm on my way to bed and I'm allergic to doing to much editing on stuff I know I'm going to have too rework extensively anyway.' I heard about Ghyll from Morbus- I'm a journalist, and know him from "back in the day"... he sent me the link after I was whining I spend all day writing about a lot of things I could care less about. Believe it or not, for a newbie and nongamer, it's tough trying to keep the history of the A's _alone_. Keeping it all straight in my head while working is a little daunting, along with trying to get the hang of the formatting conventions and the interface.
 Lets see- Sean, I have no particular attachment to the currency system at all and was a little reluctant to name one for that reason, because i figured it was near and dear to someone's heart. But, figured somone would step in if I screwed it up. I'll have to go back and read the citations on the issue numbers and date system- might have gotten something a little backwards. I did read that bit about earth parodies and had to do some rewrriting as a result, but, couldn't resist the name... don't worry, I'll think of something else, though. To be honest, just wondered if anyone'd pick up on it ;-)
-PS: OK, made some changes. Was going to link to the Association fo Conspiracy Theologists, but there's an awful lot of academia out there already, so I invented a suitably mysterious war for the mysterious Shwarmph... seems like such a contentious world probably comes to blows more often than this record currently reflects. Also, linked to "luminous text." Am thinking it's some sort of successor to illuminated manuscripts, maybe with hyperlinks, or glows in the dark, or is neon or projects like a hologram- for the hell of it. Just thought it might be fun to define if anyone chooses inherits it. --[[User:Bast ResNovae|Bast ResNovae]] 10:09, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)
+PS: OK, made some changes. Was going to link to the Association of Conspiracy Theologists, but there's an awful lot of academia out there already, so I invented a suitably mysterious war for the mysterious Shwarmph... seems like such a contentious world probably comes to blows more often than this record currently reflects. Also, linked to "luminous manuscript." Am thinking it's some sort of successor to illuminated manuscripts, maybe with hyperlinks, or glows in the dark, or is neon or projects like a hologram- for the hell of it. Just thought it might be fun to define if anyone chooses to inherit it. --[[User:Bast ResNovae|Bast ResNovae]] 10:09, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)

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 Welcome Bast!  I agree with Sean, an excellent entry on to the scene of Ghyll.  Hmmm... Sean is introducing a currency system, and I just introduced a set of day and month names to work with the existing calender... this should be fun.  Hope to be seeing more from you Bast.  Feel free to add commentary to the end of other folk's entries if you'd like.  Just remember that comments aren't "binding" upon the world, while actual entries are. --[[User:Qwentyth Pyre|Qwentyth Pyre]] 00:41, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)
 Thanks! No, I knew about the typos, It was just I'm on my way to bed and I'm allergic to doing to much editing on stuff I know I'm going to have too rework extensively anyway. I heard about Ghyll from Morbus- I'm a journalist, and know him from "back in the day"... he sent me the link after I was whining I spend all day writing about a lot of things I could care less about. Believe it or not, for a newbie and nongamer, it's tough trying to keep the history of the A's _alone_. Keeping it all straight in my head while working is a little daunting, along with trying to get the hang of the formatting conventions and the interface.
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 Lets see- Sean, I have no particular attachment to the currency system at all and was a little reluctant to name one for that reason, because i figured it was near and dear to someone's heart. But, figured somone would step in if I screwed it up. I'll have to go back and read the citations on the issue numbers and date system- might have gotten something a little backwards. I did read that bit about earth parodies and had to do some rewrriting as a result, but, couldn't resist the name... don't worry, I'll think of something else, though. To be honest, just wondered if anyone'd pick up on it ;-)
-PS: OK, made some changes. Was going to link to the Association fo Conspiracy Theologists, but there's an awful lot of academia out there already, so I invented a suitably mysterious war for the mysterious Shwarmph... seems like such a contentious world probably comes to blows more often than this record currently reflects. Also, linked to "luminous text." Am thinking it's some sort of successor to illuminated manuscripts, maybe with hyperlinks, or glows in the dark, or is neon or projects like a hologram- for the hell of it. Just thought it might be fun to define if anyone chooses inherits it.
+PS: OK, made some changes. Was going to link to the Association fo Conspiracy Theologists, but there's an awful lot of academia out there already, so I invented a suitably mysterious war for the mysterious Shwarmph... seems like such a contentious world probably comes to blows more often than this record currently reflects. Also, linked to "luminous text." Am thinking it's some sort of successor to illuminated manuscripts, maybe with hyperlinks, or glows in the dark, or is neon or projects like a hologram- for the hell of it. Just thought it might be fun to define if anyone chooses inherits it. --[[User:Bast ResNovae|Bast ResNovae]] 10:09, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)

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	Welcome Bast! I agree with Sean, an excellent entry on to the scene of Ghyll. Hmmm... Sean is introducing a currency system, and I just introduced a set of day and month names to work with the existing calender... this should be fun. Hope to be seeing more from you Bast. Feel free to add commentary to the end of other folk's entries if you'd like. Just remember that comments aren't "binding" upon the world, while actual entries are. --[[User:Qwentyth Pyre\|Qwentyth Pyre]] 00:41, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)		Welcome Bast! I agree with Sean, an excellent entry on to the scene of Ghyll. Hmmm... Sean is introducing a currency system, and I just introduced a set of day and month names to work with the existing calender... this should be fun. Hope to be seeing more from you Bast. Feel free to add commentary to the end of other folk's entries if you'd like. Just remember that comments aren't "binding" upon the world, while actual entries are. --[[User:Qwentyth Pyre\|Qwentyth Pyre]] 00:41, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)

−	Thanks! No, I knew about the typos, It was just I'm on my way to bed and I'm allergic to doing to much editing on stuff I know I'm going to have too rework extensively anyway. I heard about Ghyll from Morbus- I'm a journalist, and know him from "back in the day"... he sent me the link after I was whining I spend all day writing about a lot of things I could care less about. Believe it or not, for a newbie and nongamer, it's tough trying to keep the history of the A's _alone_ straight in my head! while working is a little daunting, along with trying to get the hang of the formatting conventions and the interface.

−	Lets see- Sean, I have no particular attachment to the currency system at all and was a little reluctant to name one for that reason, because i figured it was near and dear to someone's heart. But, figured somone would step in if I screwed it up. I'll have to go back and read the citations on the issue numbers and date system- might have gotten something a little backwards. I did read that bit about earth parodies and had to do some rewrriting as a result, but, couldn't resist the name... don't worry, I'll think of something else, though. To be honest, just wondered if anyone'd pick up on it ;-) --[[User:Bast ResNovae\|Bast ResNovae]] 10:09, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)	+	Thanks! No, I knew about the typos, It was just I'm on my way to bed and I'm allergic to doing to much editing on stuff I know I'm going to have too rework extensively anyway. I heard about Ghyll from Morbus- I'm a journalist, and know him from "back in the day"... he sent me the link after I was whining I spend all day writing about a lot of things I could care less about. Believe it or not, for a newbie and nongamer, it's tough trying to keep the history of the A's _alone_. Keeping it all straight in my head while working is a little daunting, along with trying to get the hang of the formatting conventions and the interface.
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		+	Lets see- Sean, I have no particular attachment to the currency system at all and was a little reluctant to name one for that reason, because i figured it was near and dear to someone's heart. But, figured somone would step in if I screwed it up. I'll have to go back and read the citations on the issue numbers and date system- might have gotten something a little backwards. I did read that bit about earth parodies and had to do some rewrriting as a result, but, couldn't resist the name... don't worry, I'll think of something else, though. To be honest, just wondered if anyone'd pick up on it ;-)
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		+	PS: OK, made some changes. Was going to link to the Association fo Conspiracy Theologists, but there's an awful lot of academia out there already, so I invented a suitably mysterious war for the mysterious Shwarmph... seems like such a contentious world probably comes to blows more often than this record currently reflects. Also, linked to "luminous text." Am thinking it's some sort of successor to illuminated manuscripts, maybe with hyperlinks, or glows in the dark, or is neon or projects like a hologram- for the hell of it. Just thought it might be fun to define if anyone chooses inherits it.
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		+	--[[User:Bast ResNovae\|Bast ResNovae]] 10:09, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)

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-Sorry, I'm new to this- Am I even close?
+==Out-Of-Game Discussion==
---[[User:Bast ResNovae|Bast ResNovae]]
+Sorry, I'm new to this- Am I even close? --[[User:Bast ResNovae|Bast ResNovae]] 22:15, 11 Sep 2004
-Hi there! Welcome to Ghyll and thanks for taking the time to play, etc. Your entry is a pretty good one (I'm being consistentl surprised by the outstanding quality of random players that've stumbled across Ghyll--may I ask where you found out about it from?), but of course there are quite a few little things that I'm able to nitpick at.
+Hi there! Welcome to Ghyll and thanks for taking the time to play, etc. Your entry is a pretty good one (I'm being consistently surprised by the outstanding quality of random players that've stumbled across Ghyll--may I ask where you found out about it from?), but of course there are quite a few little things that I'm able to nitpick at.
-For a start, though the name "Izzy Eddard" is hilarious, we try to avoid earth parodies as much as possible. Though it's certainly in keeping with the feel of many of the current Ghyll names, and indeed follows a pattern similar to "Morphous Ibb" in [[Quezlarian Numerals]], it'd be nice if you could think of something equally as hilarious but without the earth parody overtones.
+For a start, though the name "Izzy Eddard" is hilarious, we try to avoid earth parodies as much as possible. Though it's certainly in keeping with the feel of many of the current Ghyll names, and indeed follows a pattern similar to "Morphous Ibb" in [[Quezlarian numerals]], it'd be nice if you could think of something equally as hilarious but without the earth parody overtones.
 Secondly, since "Folktown Records edition 419 was issued on -5/12/8 EC" according to [http://inamidst.com/misc/folkrec/419 my little script], that means that FR must've commented on his disappearance ''before'' he disappeared, which is course is rather inconsistent. You might want to use the online script linked above to find an FR edition after -4/7/22 that suits your tastes. Remember that due to the dates being negative, -4 comes ''after'' -5. It is a bit confusing; sorry!
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 It's funny that the entry I'm about to post also invented a currency system (that's intrinsic to one of the jokes of the entry), and one that's named quite similarly to yours. Since yours doesn't seem to be intrinsic to the meaning of the entry, I've renamed it [currency] for now, and will fill it in with my own when I've published it, for consistency. If you really, really want to use the original name, please let me know (or simply edit it back) so that we can discuss which one to use.
-So all in all, very good effort, but needs a bit more tweaking from you. And welcome again to Ghyll!
+So all in all, very good effort, but needs a bit more tweaking from you. And welcome again to Ghyll! --[[User:Sbp|Sean B. Palmer]] 23:31, 11 Sep 2004 (EDT)
 Welcome Bast!  I agree with Sean, an excellent entry on to the scene of Ghyll.  Hmmm... Sean is introducing a currency system, and I just introduced a set of day and month names to work with the existing calender... this should be fun.  Hope to be seeing more from you Bast.  Feel free to add commentary to the end of other folk's entries if you'd like.  Just remember that comments aren't "binding" upon the world, while actual entries are. --[[User:Qwentyth Pyre|Qwentyth Pyre]] 00:41, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)
-Thanks! No, I knew about the typos, It was just I'm on my way to bed and I'm allergic to doing to much editing on stuff I know I'm going to have to rework extensively anyway. I heard about Ghyll from Morbus- I'm a journalist, and know him from "back in the day"... he sent me the link after I was whining I spend all day writiga about a lot of things I could care less about. Believe it or not, for a newbie and nongamer, it's tough trying to keep the history of the A's _alone_ straight in my head! while working is a little daunting, along with trying to get the hang of the formatting conventions and the interface.
+Thanks! No, I knew about the typos, It was just I'm on my way to bed and I'm allergic to doing to much editing on stuff I know I'm going to have too rework extensively anyway. I heard about Ghyll from Morbus- I'm a journalist, and know him from "back in the day"... he sent me the link after I was whining I spend all day writing about a lot of things I could care less about. Believe it or not, for a newbie and nongamer, it's tough trying to keep the history of the A's _alone_ straight in my head! while working is a little daunting, along with trying to get the hang of the formatting conventions and the interface.
---[[User:Bast Res Novae|Bast Res Novae]] 10:09, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)
+Lets see- Sean, I have no particular attachment to the currency system at all and was a little reluctant to name one for that reason, because i figured it was near and dear to someone's heart. But, figured somone would step in if I screwed it up. I'll have to go back and read the citations on the issue numbers and date system- might have gotten something a little backwards. I did read that bit about earth parodies and had to do some rewrriting as a result, but, couldn't resist the name... don't worry, I'll think of something else, though. To be honest, just wondered if anyone'd pick up on it ;-) --[[User:Bast ResNovae|Bast ResNovae]] 10:09, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)

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	Welcome Bast! I agree with Sean, an excellent entry on to the scene of Ghyll. Hmmm... Sean is introducing a currency system, and I just introduced a set of day and month names to work with the existing calender... this should be fun. Hope to be seeing more from you Bast. Feel free to add commentary to the end of other folk's entries if you'd like. Just remember that comments aren't "binding" upon the world, while actual entries are. --[[User:Qwentyth Pyre\|Qwentyth Pyre]] 00:41, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)		Welcome Bast! I agree with Sean, an excellent entry on to the scene of Ghyll. Hmmm... Sean is introducing a currency system, and I just introduced a set of day and month names to work with the existing calender... this should be fun. Hope to be seeing more from you Bast. Feel free to add commentary to the end of other folk's entries if you'd like. Just remember that comments aren't "binding" upon the world, while actual entries are. --[[User:Qwentyth Pyre\|Qwentyth Pyre]] 00:41, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)
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		+	Thanks! No, I knew about the typos, It was just I'm on my way to bed and I'm allergic to doing to much editing on stuff I know I'm going to have to rework extensively anyway. I heard about Ghyll from Morbus- I'm a journalist, and know him from "back in the day"... he sent me the link after I was whining I spend all day writiga about a lot of things I could care less about. Believe it or not, for a newbie and nongamer, it's tough trying to keep the history of the A's _alone_ straight in my head! while working is a little daunting, along with trying to get the hang of the formatting conventions and the interface.
		+
		+	Lets see- Sean, I have no particular attachment to the currency system at all and was a little reluctant to name one for that reason, because i figured it was near and dear to someone's heart. But, figured somone would step in if I screwed it up. I'll have to go back and read the citations on the issue numbers and date system- might have gotten something a little backwards. I did read that bit about earth parodies and had to do some rewrriting as a result, but, couldn't resist the name... don't worry, I'll think of something else, though. To be honest, just wondered if anyone'd pick up on it ;-)
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		+	--[[User:Bast Res Novae\|Bast Res Novae]] 10:09, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)

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		+	Welcome Bast! I agree with Sean, an excellent entry on to the scene of Ghyll. Hmmm... Sean is introducing a currency system, and I just introduced a set of day and month names to work with the existing calender... this should be fun. Hope to be seeing more from you Bast. Feel free to add commentary to the end of other folk's entries if you'd like. Just remember that comments aren't "binding" upon the world, while actual entries are. --[[User:Qwentyth Pyre\|Qwentyth Pyre]] 00:41, 12 Sep 2004 (EDT)

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	Sorry, I'm new to this- Am I even close?		Sorry, I'm new to this- Am I even close?
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		+	Hi there! Welcome to Ghyll and thanks for taking the time to play, etc. Your entry is a pretty good one (I'm being consistentl surprised by the outstanding quality of random players that've stumbled across Ghyll--may I ask where you found out about it from?), but of course there are quite a few little things that I'm able to nitpick at.
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		+	For a start, though the name "Izzy Eddard" is hilarious, we try to avoid earth parodies as much as possible. Though it's certainly in keeping with the feel of many of the current Ghyll names, and indeed follows a pattern similar to "Morphous Ibb" in [[Quezlarian Numerals]], it'd be nice if you could think of something equally as hilarious but without the earth parody overtones.
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		+	Secondly, since "Folktown Records edition 419 was issued on -5/12/8 EC" according to [http://inamidst.com/misc/folkrec/419 my little script], that means that FR must've commented on his disappearance ''before'' he disappeared, which is course is rather inconsistent. You might want to use the online script linked above to find an FR edition after -4/7/22 that suits your tastes. Remember that due to the dates being negative, -4 comes ''after'' -5. It is a bit confusing; sorry!
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		+	By "aurosociology" I presume you meant [[AuroAnthropology]], and though I wasn't sure, I corrected it anyway. You can check out all of the [http://gamegrene.com/wiki/?title=Bobby_Shwarmph&diff=0&oldid=698 little copyediting changes] I made (argh, actually the diff sucks so it'll be difficult for you to find them). The one thing that I wasn't able to do is pick your citations for you. According to the rules, you have to refer to one existing entry, and two new "phantom" entries. It's up to you to select which ones you want to link, so I'm leaving it down to you. Check out the bottom of all of the existing entries for the letter "b" as examples of what kind of thing we'd like.
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		+	Also, who is "Glynn"? He's mentioned only once in the article and not explained. You spelled "Shwarmph" wrong a couple of times too, which is probably not a good thing as you're writing an article on him! At least you're not writing [[Supetupheraraphes]]...
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		+	It's funny that the entry I'm about to post also invented a currency system (that's intrinsic to one of the jokes of the entry), and one that's named quite similarly to yours. Since yours doesn't seem to be intrinsic to the meaning of the entry, I've renamed it [currency] for now, and will fill it in with my own when I've published it, for consistency. If you really, really want to use the original name, please let me know (or simply edit it back) so that we can discuss which one to use.
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		+	So all in all, very good effort, but needs a bit more tweaking from you. And welcome again to Ghyll!
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		+	--[[User:Sbp\|Sean B. Palmer]] 23:31, 11 Sep 2004 (EDT)