Ghyll talk:Kan d'Aire

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I enjoyed this one. Am a bit concerned about some of the "flow" - if she's been burnt, and is dead, then she HAS died, and the family HAS gone away. Yet, your first paragraph talks as if she hasn't died. --Morbus Iff 09:25, 5 Aug 2005 (EDT)

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